Her favourite Ball
Her favourite Ball
By Senan Ó Dorchaí
One day we went to the park with my sister's favourite ball. I started kicking the ball to my Dad and I scored a goal. I was very pleased with myself but when I went in goal, I could not save one shot. I could not believe I let in so many goals and I was deflated. Then, I distracted my Dad and I finally saved a shot, but my glory was short lived! My sister asked for her ball back but I could not see where the it had gone. ‘But were did it go’ she shouted; she wasn’t happy. After a while we found it hidden behind a big bush
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Senan,
ReplyDeleteYour word choice DEFLATED was such a good one because it made me think about the narrator's mood, but it also seems to fit so well in a story about losing a ball!
Keep writing.
Mrs. G., Team 100, Guilderland, NY, USA